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    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    3.95 - 139/254/170
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1277
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    dotsCircledots
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    My wine was thick and breathless
    that one night, between glittering spaces -
    of glass tables, sprinklers
    of candlelight here and there
    in italic, setting a mood,
    and cheap-looking Christmas d├ęcor - -
    and I was cheap, too, dulled
    by the cold outside, and the wet wind,
    and my own damp slipping
    stockings, and that particular
    stretch of the ankles
    in heels, smuggling apples
    from the hotel vase.

    I listened to you play and clapped
    marveling at the way your hands
    flew over the piano, the way it did
    your bidding, so much compressed
    space in those 1,5m, I bet
    time, too, is
    a circle.










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