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    dots Submission Name: Love is amazingdots
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    Author: Dark Dann
    ASL Info:    18/ Male/ San Diego
    Elite Ratio:    6.44 - 78/67/53
    Words: 219
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 452
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       I wrote this for my gf for christmas. Unfortunately I feel that it came out lame.


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    dotsLove is amazingdots
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    Oh, how amazing this feeling
    Oh, how amazing this feeling
    How didn't I ever know what being in love
    Would feel like?

    Years of pain and misery,
    Years of doubts and fears
    Years of hiding from it
    Running from it,
    Oh, how I loathed what love was.

    But then you came along
    My darling
    Then you came along;
    And provided a spark in the air
    Star lights and water falls
    Silver linings lighting up the sky
    It was a natural unnatural occurrence.
    But i fell in love with you.

    Don't misunderstand me love,
    Don't be too quick to judge.
    I never thought I would know what love is
    I never thought my heart would feel right.
    Love, since you came along I saw stars and hearts
    They light up the sky every night.

    This heart of mine,
    A heart of stone,
    Was moved by angel
    That shone brighter than any star
    When I gaze upon your eyes
    And kiss your tender lips
    Shock waves pierce my body
    I'm surrounded with this sweet Ecstasy.
    An ecstasy called love.

    Words can't even begin to tell you
    How grateful I am that you open my eyes
    and showed me a world full of light and dreams
    And made me believe in how great love can be




    Submitted on 2014-12-25 18:34:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I was touched by the simple innocence in this.
    | Posted on 2014-12-27 00:00:00 | by Ontlogicalamity | [ Reply to This ]


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