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    dots Submission Name: Looking for Lovedots
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    Author: Piper
    ASL Info:    23/ Female/ The System
    Elite Ratio:    2.43 - 52/54/37
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
    Total Views: 600
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    Bytes: 812



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       I love Whitesnake. Hence the title.


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    dotsLooking for Lovedots
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    When I was young
    I used to date
    A Russian man
    Who always wore a frown
    He was rude and he was moody
    Always Putin me down.

    So I ran to Cuba
    And met a man
    Who had me very sated.
    I loved my Fidel very much
    But my Fidel got Castro-ated.

    When I traveled to the US
    I met a bunch of Baracks.
    They were handsome
    They were smart
    But they thought with their Obamas.

    Finally I met a guy
    And his name was Kim
    He was Yung and he was wealthy
    But sadistic and quite grim.

    Years gone by,
    I'm still looking
    Why not visit Germany?
    Who's that woman
    Who looks like an Angel?
    Merkel,
    will you marry me?




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    ||| Comments |||
      Ahh, this was great!
    Such a great structure and clevercleverclever approach to each country and man described.
    Very original while still retaining it's fluidity; awesome to be found!

    Thanks for sharing!

    ~Vincent
    | Posted on 2015-01-02 00:00:00 | by Vismare | [ Reply to This ]


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