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    dots Submission Name: bounddots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       Boredom in the third trimester


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    Sometimes I need help
    Sometimes I feel trapped inside my being
    Familiar things like armies rushing toward the inside walls of a castle that battles just to stand

    Waiting for waves by the sea
    Catching emotion as water paints a gray wet shadow by my feet
    why do I stand here when I can't wait to get away
    Why am I screaming and fighting with my family if I don't want to be alone anymore

    Why do I sleep when I need to be awake

    The distance to the answer is like a million miles away and a mountain to climb
    An ocean to swim
    A paradox unsolved and on display at a beautiful museum




    Submitted on 2014-12-28 13:20:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is gonna sound glib but life is supposed to be this way, especially for one as young as you. Many people spend their entire lives questing for answers to their questions only to wind up with the fact that life is so much a paradox. I say be grateful for the intellectual acuity you can muster and the insight to perceive that some answers are unknowable. It seems to me that if life was without problems we would live in thoughtless bliss as though too inebriated to be self determining. "a mountain to climb An ocean to swim" these are good things, I say be grateful for the challenge.

    Bruce

    PS: I think I've been to that museum.
    | Posted on 2014-12-28 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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