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    dots Submission Name: The Notedots

    Author: Thenocturnal
    ASL Info:    24 / Male / Darkness
    Elite Ratio:    1.05 - 4/4/4
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    dotsThe Notedots

    What will you say to your newborn son?
    If he wants to see the blue sky and sunshine
    What will you say to your newborn son?
    If he wants to eat and smile every time

    How can you protect your newborn son?
    When the wolves will set a knife in his heart
    How can you protect your newborn son?
    When he can’t breathe and falls down

    I find this note in a corner of my mind.....
    Oh, I find this note in a corner of my mind....

    Now stop being quiet, think severely
    Doesn’t it torture, when the rich folk spits at you?
    Doesn’t it hurt, when they through stone at you?
    Will you still live as it really nothing matters?

    Stop being quiet, and say can't do this to me anymore, oh, you carnivore
    So, lift your spirit and make the shot calmly…
    Yes, you can hang your head, but will breathe easily…
    You could go to the prison, but live freely…

    Submitted on 2014-12-29 08:35:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Lol... Human minds think differently, you know. Whatever, thanks for your precious comment, though I was not thinking about vampire while writing this poetry or lyric whatever it is.thanks again.
    | Posted on 2015-01-01 00:00:00 | by Thenocturnal | [ Reply to This ]
      For some reason the first stanza made me think of maybe a vampires child... how they (fabled) wouldn't be able to go outside because the sunlight would kill them. and when they fed on the blood of others they would smile and be proud of themselves... I don't know, maybe I'm just weird but I enjoyed this write. Keep it up.
    | Posted on 2014-12-30 00:00:00 | by Teofila | [ Reply to This ]

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