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    dots Submission Name: Sleepdots
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    Author: Vismare
    Elite Ratio:    4.84 - 19/16/9
    Words: 63
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       A little piece I conjured when lying in bed unable to sleep!


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    dotsSleepdots
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    This pulling tension in my head
    Leaves me staring, in my bed
    The darkness, sharp and keen
    Masks all that which is seen

    With open eyes,
    It is no surprise,
    I long and search for what lies,
    Or simply what just might comprise
    Of what is restless in my mind.

    The mystery
    May come to me,
    Once I fall
    Asleep.




    Submitted on 2014-12-30 11:37:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Loved this piece! I truly can relate to it cause insomnia sometimes visits me uninvitingly too! I loved how you start with "This pulling tension in my head..." so true...

    Keep on writing! :)

    D-Ink
    | Posted on 2015-01-02 00:00:00 | by D-Ink | [ Reply to This ]


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