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    dots Submission Name: Humpty Dumpty Was Simply A Shelldots
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    Author: Vismare
    Elite Ratio:    4.84 - 19/16/9
    Words: 235
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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    Description:
       A song I wrote with my guitar pertaining to the loss of innocence I'm sure we all experience within one's lifetime.
    Let me know if you'd like the chords to play along to it, it's pretty fun to play and sing~


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    dotsHumpty Dumpty Was Simply A Shelldots
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    What's left of this shattered broken place
    I can see it in your face
    You don't know anything,
    We had everything

    Can't you see it's all gone, faded away
    Ignore the thought and trade it for today
    And I can't stop thinking
    And it has me sinking

    It's past the point of measuring,
    Here we are with just our bodies weathering,
    And that's the only sign
    That I've found to find

    And I feel, I feel it's taking its toll
    And I no longer feel whole,
    I feel it in my soul, and can't you see
    This innocence is not what it used to be

    We never actually see it, until we are free,
    and we conceive it
    Try, just try and find that,
    that we don't need it
    Preservation of a memory, best that I believe it,
    And keep it in the heart of me to live, exhale, and breathe it.

    We witness that it's wilting,
    But make sure that we building
    What petals fall off, they're nothing,
    They're not guilty, of a loss that is just broken
    Eternal, can't be spoken,
    Cleanse this thought that's grown with me
    And set this plan in motion

    Cause I feel, I feel it's taken its toll,
    And finally I feel whole,
    I feel it in my soul, and can't you see
    This innocence has always been with me.




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      Good song! I love how poetic the song sounds!

    D-Ink
    | Posted on 2015-01-01 00:00:00 | by D-Ink | [ Reply to This ]


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