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    dots Submission Name: The Hotel Roomdots
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    Author: Teofila
    ASL Info:    17, F, with the wolves
    Elite Ratio:    0.48 - 210/102/70
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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    dotsThe Hotel Roomdots
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    On the top floor
    There's a hotel room
    With the window open
    To let in the full moon...

    The sky was bright,
    Glittered with stars.
    A girl looks down
    And sees her scars...

    She felt alone
    In this big world
    With no one to know
    What he did to her...

    She climbs to the sill
    And looks down to the ground
    Wondering if
    She will hear the sound
    Of people screaming
    As her body is found...




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    ||| Comments |||
      So dramatic haha. I feel like this whole piece is a metaphor for when we as people get stressed and just wanna hit something
    | Posted on 2015-01-01 00:00:00 | by kase | [ Reply to This ]
      Cool piece! I can picture it easily in my mind...hate what the guy must'ave did to her for her to commit suicide...nonetheless, good write! :)
    | Posted on 2015-01-01 00:00:00 | by D-Ink | [ Reply to This ]


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