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The Hotel Room


Author: Teofila
ASL Info:    17, F, with the wolves
Elite Ratio:    0.4 - 210 /104 /71
Words: 79
Class/Type: Poetry /Death
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Description:




The Hotel Room



On the top floor
There's a hotel room
With the window open
To let in the full moon...

The sky was bright,
Glittered with stars.
A girl looks down
And sees her scars...

She felt alone
In this big world
With no one to know
What he did to her...

She climbs to the sill
And looks down to the ground
Wondering if
She will hear the sound
Of people screaming
As her body is found...




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  So dramatic haha. I feel like this whole piece is a metaphor for when we as people get stressed and just wanna hit something
| Posted on 2015-01-01 00:00:00 | by kase | [ Reply to This ]
  Cool piece! I can picture it easily in my mind...hate what the guy must'ave did to her for her to commit suicide...nonetheless, good write! :)
| Posted on 2015-01-01 00:00:00 | by D-Ink | [ Reply to This ]


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