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    dots Submission Name: Haiku (attempt)dots
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    Author: Teofila
    ASL Info:    17, F, with the wolves
    Elite Ratio:    0.4 - 210/104/71
    Words: 26
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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    The sky is gloomy
    Until the dark cloud goes by
    Now the light breaks though




    Submitted on 2014-12-30 22:12:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Is the gloom of the sky lit by the dark cloud passing by?
    It seems as though the sky is gloomy, and when the dark cloud passes, light breaks through.

    That's how I interpreted it, and can relate it to when, say, a writer is sad or depressed, it can bring about great works of art and word!
    Although negative emotion can manifest itself in bad ways, it can be manifested and placed into different mediums and cause greatness!

    Here's a stab at a haiku:

    Five syllables, hard
    Seven syllables, easy
    Five more, a bit hard
    | Posted on 2015-01-01 00:00:00 | by Vismare | [ Reply to This ]


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