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    dots Submission Name: My answer to youdots
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    Author: D-Ink
    Elite Ratio:    1.38 - 81/59/58
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsMy answer to youdots
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    What is sweeter and purer than the taste of honey,
    Your words, alike.
    A comfort found in its substance.
    My senses, feast upon your ability
    To flip and twirl into an assortment of personas.
    One, which had me enraptured with felicity, while
    Another, capsized with your sheer arrogance of ignorance.
    You got me trembled with utmost dread and uncertainty...
    The moment our eyes met.
    But truth behold,
    Is a lie.
    For you never once looked me in the eye,
    But always, with a surety,
    Of eyes cast downwards,
    Looking down at me.
    Did i feel the way you make me feel,
    Till today.
    And trust me, when i say,
    Give it up, cause I'm staying put.
    In a matter of time, you'll see.
    That what goes round,
    Comes around, especially in this world.
    Where everything is still an unsightly blur.




    Submitted on 2015-01-01 09:37:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Very perceptive towards whoever this is geared to (if any).
    I've met many people like this, especially who share the "arrogance of ignorance". (Very cool line!)
    The last half really makes the piece come together, I thought it was a very insightful, descriptive read!!!!

    ~Vincent
    | Posted on 2015-01-01 00:00:00 | by Vismare | [ Reply to This ]
      Not 20/20 I see not the good nor the bad in you funny though.
    | Posted on 2015-01-01 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]


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