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    dots Submission Name: Night Commutedots

    Author: Vismare
    Elite Ratio:    4.84 - 19/16/9
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsNight Commutedots

    It's 3 am, late at night
    Early morning if you prefer
    Driving, running all red lights
    Speeding, empty, all a blur.

    It's wet outside and it has rained
    Constellations comprised of watered light
    My windshield speckled, watered, stained
    A blurry world, but starry sight.

    Shadowed objects in the street
    Show themselves in silhouette
    First glace I took, and in my seat
    Creatures, beings, strongly set.

    Faded streams of objects passing
    Reflected lines, undemensioned
    Limit of speed, I seem surpassing
    A world of unknown, unintentioned.

    Finally home, but not forgotten
    The world I saw at such a time
    And even though I was begotten
    I'll always view it as a sublime.

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      I think that to work within the restraints of a rhyme scheme or meter is an adequate task. I think that if any poet wants to become better or more equipped to attempt all types of writings then this pursuit is an excellent course along which to set oneself.

    My windshield speckled, watered, stained
    A blurry world, but starry sight.

    Like I think that there is kind of lovely
    and deep and rich with insight.

    I wish you well in your travels with this.

    Daniel :)
    | Posted on 2015-01-03 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
      thoughts sullen yet sober in the rearview
    brought about resolve, and dissolve into a clear view.
    the bitter taste of bark, had it's side effects,
    and though i dream a we as one, it's yet to happen yet.

    musings on your verse. well written. seemingly clear in process.
    | Posted on 2015-01-03 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]

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