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    dots Submission Name: Tonightdots
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    Author: Teofila
    ASL Info:    17, F, with the wolves
    Elite Ratio:    0.4 - 210/104/71
    Words: 180
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       My best friend Austin Iovito actually helped me with this one and contributed to it. Its mainly just the thoughts of a boy I love, Balin Ethan Daniel Robbins. I love/miss you Bae!
    Austin helped for a girl he loves... Dreanna he misses you very much...


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    dotsTonightdots
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    Tonight I sit and I reminisce
    About how things used to be.
    About all the times we had,
    When it was just you and me...

    Your life was way too short
    No thanks to that tree
    It all ended
    Just so unexpectedly...

    Why did you have to go?
    Even when we broke up
    You said you would always be there
    And now I feel so alone...
    I guess, Happy new year...

    I miss when you were here
    To tell me "everything will be alright".
    Even when we were both uncertain
    You still tried to shed some light...

    Why is it I have given you my heart?
    Why must the loss of you tear me apart?
    I know you always hated to see me cry,
    But it seems to be all I can do tonight...

    I know you don't want us to dwell on it.
    You only ever wanted us to be happy.
    I can just see you look at me and say,
    "Life goes on without me..."

    I really miss you B!




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      In the last year youve grown so much and it shows in your writing. Yourr evolving into such a great poet. I love your rhymes and theyre only getting better.

    Miss you T!!
    | Posted on 2015-03-01 00:00:00 | by kase | [ Reply to This ]
      Very touchy and wonderfully written. I like it..
    | Posted on 2015-01-19 00:00:00 | by Thenocturnal | [ Reply to This ]
      :'(
    Very sad and emotional...I can really relate.
    Bound in brevity and wholly represented.
    Written amazingly, my sorrow emits.

    I wonder how "B" would have reacted hearing this~

    | Posted on 2015-01-02 00:00:00 | by Vismare | [ Reply to This ]


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