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    dots Submission Name: The Unreachable and the Willingdots
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    Author: riverrei
    ASL Info:    25/F/MI
    Elite Ratio:    5.93 - 64/34/61
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsThe Unreachable and the Willingdots
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    Would it make sense
    to reach for that which shows promise,
    or rather remain waiting in the shadows
    for one who will never show interest?

    This dilemma clouds rational thought.
    Two so similar to one another,
    and yet can be so similar.
    It hardly seems real.

    Few major differences between them.
    One only seeing each other in passing,
    the other trying to get to know me.
    Both make me happy just by the sound of their voice.

    How could this be possible?
    The situation – ridiculous.
    Showing affection for one who doesn’t care.
    How stupid can I be?

    False hope guiding my actions,
    I begin pursuing both.
    Getting to know the willing,
    I wait for the unreachable to notice me.




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      An interesting write about a universal dilemma. Young adults tend to choose the one that makes their hearts flutter far, but which also lets them fall into an abyss. I have chosen the unreachable myself once. Happy moments were fleeting yet were peak experiences for me. But so were moments of sadness and anger, peaking downward...and not as fleeting, but more like an everyday life. But we choose them for a reason. It may be false hope guiding our actions as you said, but there is always a reason. And that is for us to learn from the experience and to choose more wisely next time. Something that will bring harmony into our life, and not chaos with false promises. I loved this. It made me relieve my past.
    | Posted on 2015-01-28 00:00:00 | by wordsofmind | [ Reply to This ]


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