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    dots Submission Name: The Word of a Queendots
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    Author: riverrei
    ASL Info:    25/F/MI
    Elite Ratio:    5.93 - 64/34/61
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe Word of a Queendots
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    Fear of the unknown,
    a common theme to life.
    Even you, when you should fear not,
    for someday I shall be your wife.

    Oh, how happy the thought!
    You and me in nothing but blissful harmony.
    Recently, ho hard for you have I fought,
    just to see your loving face at least once.

    From miles away we hold each other,
    knowing only the feeling of bliss.
    Seek your hope and faith in this:
    I would wait forever to taste your kiss.

    You are my life, my everything;
    my entire being devoted to you.
    I will treat you as a king,
    and we will be happy, just us two.

    As your queen, all you desire will be true,
    for the word of a queen shall never falter.
    Anything you want I will do,
    to repay you for how happy you make me.




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    Fear of the unknown,
    my common theme, also life.
    even when you should fear me not,
    someday you will ask me be your queen.

    Oh, how happy the thoughts of my mental state!
    Subject to me in nothing but blissful harmony
    recent betrayal for you have I fought hard
    alas to see your loving face once again.

    I see miles away we hold each other
    we two know only this state of bliss.
    I seek, want your love and faith in me
    my wait lasts forever to grant your kiss.

    You are my life, my reality, my existence
    my entire being is devoted, ruled by you.
    I will make you my king, my betrothed
    we’ll be happy, loved subject to none.

    As I am your queen, your desire I will be
    orders of a queen shall never be questioned
    love, anything you desire I will grant my king,
    love me or off with your damn head my subject!

    | Posted on 2015-01-05 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      I loved the opening stanza.
    "Even you when you should fear not for I shall be your wife"

    I was suprised at the direction this went, though pleased.

    Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2015-01-04 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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