This site will self destruct in 2 months, March 17.
It will come back, and be familiar and at the same time completely different.
All content will be deleted. Backup anything important.
--- Staff
Roleplay Cloud -

Sign up to EliteSkills

Already have an account? Login to Roleplay.Cloud
Forgot password? Recover Password

Life is Toxic

Author: Forgiven
ASL Info:    38/F/Florida
Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 339 /335 /100
Words: 122
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
Total Views: 2006
Average Vote:    No vote yet.
Bytes: 838


Life is Toxic

I was alive for moments,
breathing in its air..
that I thought was clearing my mind....

I was allowing its contamination.

Breathing it to my core,
allowing it to poison me
even when I knew what it was
I allowed it finish its course.

But now,
The obscurity has lifted,
and my eyes are clearing.

I can see its "truths" for what they really were.
I'm now on my guard,
and there is no
secrete password,
no hidden door,
Im locked here
and its time to piece it back together
before I walk back to the sun.

But Ill give it to you life...
lesson learned,
point taken,
its been written down.


Submitted on 2015-01-05 20:15:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
Edit post

Rate This Submission

1: >_<
2: I dunno...
3: meh!
4: Pretty cool
5: Wow!


  When I was a young whippersnapper I tipped a cow over when it was trying to sleep.

I like to think that the cow thought "Ha ha! You got me mofo!!!" Because it didn't seem to get upset that I interrupted it.

And...I have no constructive criticism for this one Denise.

| Posted on 2015-02-27 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
  Lesson? Learned.

did someone mention secret doors?
neuropathy and coffin locks
shade the sun and warp the floors
with broken plates and stacks of socks

as a chorus claims the prize
(like little bits of innocence)
is only given to the wise
who were not raised to walk the fence

| Posted on 2015-01-18 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]

Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

1. Be honest.
2. Try not to give only compliments.
3. How did it make you feel?
4. Why did it make you feel that way?
5. Which parts?
6. What distracted from the piece?
7. What was unclear?
8. What does it remind you of?
9. How could it be improved?
10. What would you have done differently?
11. What was your interpretation of it?
12. Does it feel original?