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    dots Submission Name: Penmanship Practicedots
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    Author: annie0888
    ASL Info:    49/f/LA
    Elite Ratio:    4.76 - 327/382/122
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsPenmanship Practicedots
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    Penmanship Practice

    What I wouldn't give 
    for the clear communication
    of a woman in mahogany pumps
    to a nine year old boy holding 
    a sharpened Ticonderoga
    voice like warm milk
    push up, pull down, dip below
    It's no wonder I live to please 
    any woman wearing glasses 
    tethered to a rhinestone chain
    Lean forward, glide across
    the page. Oh, let me make 
    just enough of a mistake
    prompt her to stand behind me
    honey scent circling my giddy head
    Let her place a hand on my wrist
    guide my hand, hump-hump-hump 
    for m.  Touch-touch for w
    Slanting, always slanting
    gently toward the light.




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    ||| Comments |||
      So you have hidden teacher fantasies or a need to subjugate? Lol overall nicely written although I don't believe most first graders sre having these fantasies at least I hope not. Talk about problems for the poor teachr...lol. Many everyday things can be very sensual though
    | Posted on 2015-01-22 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
      That turned me on a bit, haha. Very well written, I definitely sensed the arousal and lust between the lines. I liked it a lot.
    | Posted on 2015-01-12 00:00:00 | by riverrei | [ Reply to This ]


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