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Two Nations on a Table-top


Author: MadGeologist
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Two Nations on a Table-top



On my desktop sway two flags
lazily in the winter breeze:

the taller is Russia,
standing proud on a sculpted shaft,
Siberian snow straddling both
democracy and socialism,
and reaching out for the sky.

The shorter, bent,
rising from a pen-holder
beside a headless knight
is a sellotaped Iran,
proclaiming the Almighty's glory
twenty-two times over faith and blood.




Submitted on 2015-01-11 07:18:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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