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    dots Submission Name: lost something in the rain dots

    Author: distortedcloud
    ASL Info:    25/M/London
    Elite Ratio:    6.34 - 6/8/7
    Words: 345
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Death
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    dotslost something in the rain dots

    high definition cos im frozen in time
    pixelate definition from within my cryptic mind
    so sickened by life like the writtens that take the littlest time
    selecting vision as my sence to finish the crime
    words weave life around me like i've lived and i've died
    whispers from the wingless drops to my feet in forms of drips from the sky
    a blank message in a bottle that talked of gods in ya life never to reach the eyes of man because the ink never dried
    the nights lifted from silence as the shadows emerge with sickening cries
    of demons banished by an invisible divides that deepen the lines
    governments with the talons sunk deep in your lives
    (murders committed in dark ally ways keeping newspaper alive spreading their lies)
    got their hands in everyone's pockets forcing you to survive
    hell gates protrude filling our city with fiends that seem to convene
    on ways to get the "streets clean" unholy alliance with a sweet dream
    well aint dat just a mother fuckin neat scheme...

    what the price of a life?
    why does every man think that hes dark as the night, cold as the ice.
    roads are nothing like the sea so inside me i pray that the sharks never arise
    you pull machine and don't pardon the dice
    numbers take aim as the martyrs sacrifice
    claims your mind and separates your heart from guise, on this day the rain fell from the skies
    but it didn't wash the blood from his eyes
    some one said to me that no one ever really dies
    i told him he better think twice
    family feeling it
    street niggers dealing shit
    wish i had a zoot to feel the hit
    cant believe they killed this kid
    lifes so short here for a bit then the soul and body split
    faster than it takes the light to reach our eyes
    life is the present
    so take this gift unwrap that shit
    cos love is the prize
    hope is the lies

    just open your eyes x2

    Submitted on 2015-01-11 09:01:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Different than the previous poem I read by you. I like this one a lot more then the other one. It has more depth to it and I can relate to it more. I like how descriptive you are. Keep writing, I enjoy reading your work.
    | Posted on 2015-01-12 00:00:00 | by riverrei | [ Reply to This ]

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