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lost something in the rain

Author: distortedcloud
ASL Info:    25/M/London
Elite Ratio:    6.34 - 6 /8 /7
Words: 345
Class/Type: Lyrics /Death
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lost something in the rain

high definition cos im frozen in time
pixelate definition from within my cryptic mind
so sickened by life like the writtens that take the littlest time
selecting vision as my sence to finish the crime
words weave life around me like i've lived and i've died
whispers from the wingless drops to my feet in forms of drips from the sky
a blank message in a bottle that talked of gods in ya life never to reach the eyes of man because the ink never dried
the nights lifted from silence as the shadows emerge with sickening cries
of demons banished by an invisible divides that deepen the lines
governments with the talons sunk deep in your lives
(murders committed in dark ally ways keeping newspaper alive spreading their lies)
got their hands in everyone's pockets forcing you to survive
hell gates protrude filling our city with fiends that seem to convene
on ways to get the "streets clean" unholy alliance with a sweet dream
well aint dat just a mother fuckin neat scheme...

what the price of a life?
why does every man think that hes dark as the night, cold as the ice.
roads are nothing like the sea so inside me i pray that the sharks never arise
you pull machine and don't pardon the dice
numbers take aim as the martyrs sacrifice
claims your mind and separates your heart from guise, on this day the rain fell from the skies
but it didn't wash the blood from his eyes
some one said to me that no one ever really dies
i told him he better think twice
family feeling it
street niggers dealing shit
wish i had a zoot to feel the hit
cant believe they killed this kid
lifes so short here for a bit then the soul and body split
faster than it takes the light to reach our eyes
life is the present
so take this gift unwrap that shit
cos love is the prize
hope is the lies

just open your eyes x2

Submitted on 2015-01-11 09:01:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Different than the previous poem I read by you. I like this one a lot more then the other one. It has more depth to it and I can relate to it more. I like how descriptive you are. Keep writing, I enjoy reading your work.
| Posted on 2015-01-12 00:00:00 | by riverrei | [ Reply to This ]

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