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Negative Nancy


Author: D-Ink
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Words: 202
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Negative Nancy



I have a friend
She always tags along
She's always up to no good
Always putting me down

I tried to be nice to her
To show her that things
Are not really bad
As it seems

She never listens
This friend of mine
Sometimes I wonder
How did I end up with her?

I tried to be kind
I tried not to mind
Of the words she played
On and off in my mind

When I say
I can, She'll say I can't
When I say I will,
No prizes for guessing what she'll say

She'll bring my mood down
Wherever I go
She'll make me mad
Sometimes without a reason to

I've tried to shut her down
I've tried to make her leave
But nothing seemed to work
I had no choice but to heed

I'm tired of this
I'm tired of it all
I wish I know
I wish I have

A cure, a jab
Something or anything
That'll make her stop
Even for a second

Does anybody know?
Please tell me
I'm down on my knees
I'll do anything

Just to let her go.




Submitted on 2015-01-11 10:07:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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| Posted on 2015-01-15 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
  I agree with the above tweaks/edits. I also have the below possibilities:

I'm tired of this
I'm tired of it all
I wish I know (knew)
I wish I have (had)

it just seems to flow a little better when written this way. You obviously don't have to take my suggestions, just a thought. I like the poem a lot and can definitely relate the feeling within the poem. I hope that one day you can find a happy medium with this friend, or find a resolution. Take care!
| Posted on 2015-01-12 00:00:00 | by riverrei | [ Reply to This ]
  I have a friend
She always tags along
She's always up to no good
Always putting me down

I tried to be nice to her
To show her that things
Are not really (as terrible)
As (they may) seem

Just a suggestion for a tweak that might help you keep your rhythm throughout the post. By the way, have you considered evicting Miss Nancy from the back of your skull and sub-letting to someone a little more positive like (I don't know) Captain Flash and the Christmas People? I'm sure they'd supply year round holiday music. Just some thoughts on your thoughts.

;)
| Posted on 2015-01-11 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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