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    dots Submission Name: Dead by Daybreakdots

    Author: ForgottenGraves
    ASL Info:    20, Male
    Elite Ratio:    0.46 - 5/116/131
    Words: 65
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsDead by Daybreakdots

    Howling in the moonlight,
    Then hunting at dusk.

    Our pack,
    This pack,
    Never fails a hunt.
    Never fails to feast.

    Alpha eat.
    We will wait.

    Crunching bones,
    Muscle tearing,
    Just makes our hunger grow.
    Just makes the hunt complete.

    Weak and sick.
    Smart and strong.

    Doesn't matter,
    Prey is prey,
    We hunters will catch you.
    We wolves will devour you.

    Submitted on 2015-01-12 01:58:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This would work best with a Wolverhampton accent.

    Dead by day break is an interesting title. It does leave the reader wondering whether the wolves are threatening prey: which is not a really good survival tack or whether the wolves are afraid they themselves will be dead without killing prey.

    I particularly like: weak and sick, smart and strong. This best encapsulates the pack as a family giving purpose to their hunt.

    | Posted on 2015-02-09 00:00:00 | by ContritePoet38 | [ Reply to This ]
      junk draw
    | Posted on 2015-01-15 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      I could sense the longing in this to be the one to feast first. I'm surprised that you didn't take the alpha role for this poem; most would take that spot over simply one of the pack. I like the definitive nature and confidence of a successful hunt, the last stanza is definitely my favorite.
    | Posted on 2015-01-12 00:00:00 | by riverrei | [ Reply to This ]

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