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    dots Submission Name: Male sublimationdots
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    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    26/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    4.04 - 136/243/154
    Words: 70
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsMale sublimationdots
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    I can’t write anymore tonight:
    I’ve tapped out my male muses
    whose images I interchange
    so shamelessly, so freely,
    but who is to claim
    they serve a nobler purpose
    than my artistic exploits?
    -- A sensual mouth that dares
    to venture close enough
    to mine, too far
    from a conventional good-bye --
    in all,
    they use me in as much
    as I use them, a comely
    symbiont!




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      I enjoyed this and really have no technical critique since you have a nice tight form and lines are well-written. I was somewhat amused by this piece. Most think of the muse as female, but in truth it is our relationships that galvanize and drive our writing, and so I must say mine is male also. I never used the sake of my craft as a reason/excuse, but why not. Every new encounter gives us something to write about.
    ~jan
    | Posted on 2015-02-19 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
      I personally can't imagine using a person (not trying to say you're a horrible person or anything so please don't take that the wrong way...), but I do like the concept of your piece. Using someone in a symbiotic relationship for the sake of your art. I guess I can see myself doing that to further my novel for inspiration but I like how plainly your poem puts things. Makes it seem simpler than what it really is. I enjoyed reading it :)
    | Posted on 2015-01-13 00:00:00 | by riverrei | [ Reply to This ]


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