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    dots Submission Name: (Happy) Birthdaydots

    Author: Vismare
    Elite Ratio:    4.84 - 19/16/9
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Going out and away this weekend with my siblings and family to celebrate my 21st! From past experiences I've conjured this up...hopefully the result will end differently! Hah!

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    dots(Happy) Birthdaydots

    As I age and turn another year
    My liver feels its worst off fear.
    I flashed my card with prideful gloat
    The drinks slide ever down my throat.

    Drink of choice is black spiced rum
    Twenty plus one deems its sum.
    I feel the æther filter through
    I feel the music grow, accrue.

    Waves of warmth upon my face
    Welcomes waving warmth's embrace.
    I feel unbalanced on my feet
    That's alright, the ground I'll meet.

    Softer than I thought, I thought
    Maybe too much rum I bought.
    Maybe this is not what's sought,
    Nausea's lesson must be taught.

    I feel my stomach kick my throat
    Since when was I upon a boat?!
    These waves are different, I connote
    How hard it is to stay afloat!

    I sail the storm of all that's blurred
    "Captain, get me home!!!!" I slurred.
    Next day from sleep I finally stirred
    And faced the wrath of sibling's word.

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      Hope it was a great birthday, even if it was a bit rum soaked. This was very light and easy to read with a good flow. I think most of us have been there, and done that, and someone snapped pictures to prove it.
    This will make a fun "diary piece," as I like to call them, to add to your collection. In another few years it will definitely give you chuckles to sit back and read and remember. I hope the morning after was not too bad!
    | Posted on 2015-01-28 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
      Happy birthday to you! I hope it wasn't that of a crazy night! But at least you'll have something to remember...and not repeat ;).

    Oh, dear, you said it so beautifully and accurately when one has a bit too much, not knowing one's limits and the consequences that follow. I think we can all agree we've been there at least once. Unfortunately, when you get into deep...it's a bit harder to control yourself even when you didn't plan so initially.
    | Posted on 2015-01-20 00:00:00 | by wordsofmind | [ Reply to This ]
      I remember my first couple of bouts with serious drinking leading to similar states of wretched puke-ness. Fortunately by the time I reached 21 I already had a bar I could go to that had been serving me for more than a year so I didn't O.D. (over dose). Being much older and wiser these days I almost never O.D. My 60th birthday being an exception.

    I love the fact that you're a rhyming poet. It's a lost art for most of our poets. Though some of your rhymes were a little bit forced and contrived I enjoyed this piece immensely though this may have been to an extent a product of the nostalgic contemplations it caused me. Thanks for the smile.

    | Posted on 2015-01-15 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]

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