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    dots Submission Name: summer recitaldots
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    Author: CrypticBard
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 368/381/226
    Words: 25
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Ribald footprints
    of a silent, brooding zitar
    rendezvous with an ebbing tide:
    recalcitrant thoughts wash away
    along this sandy shoal.




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      I like how short this is and yet how descriptive. It paints a picture with very few words and I find that intriguing and entertaining. I enjoyed reading it :)
    | Posted on 2015-02-12 00:00:00 | by riverrei | [ Reply to This ]
      This was so full of seeming contradictions that I been back to read several times before writing anything in response. The use of the silent zitar threw me for a while. Five little lines that have had me looking back again and again. I keep wondering if your intentions were for the imagery of music fading on a beach or if it was the denouement of something more sensual that the words "Ribald" and choice of instrument/music seem to allude to.

    I've finally decided that it does not matter, I like it either way. Both bring a sense of peace and contentment with the world. There is nothing that I would change although the title makes me wonder who the show is for and does it need to be a production?
    This one is going to my faves. Anthing that make me think this hard on a Friday deserves the honor.
    ~jan
    | Posted on 2015-01-23 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]


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