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    dots Submission Name: Day 4000dots
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    Author: jaycee
    ASL Info:    44/F/ Texas
    Elite Ratio:    5.27 - 2626/1259/187
    Words: 179
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    It's day 4000
    Over a decade spent
    drip
    drip
    dripping
    virtual ink
    virtual emotion
    down the pages
    of Elite.

    4000 days of births
    members
    ideas
    contests
    forums
    cherrypickers
    writers.

    4000 days of growth
    some
    teen angst and cutters
    to
    writers in freefall.
    children no more
    others
    from poets
    to artists
    master craftsmen
    fine tuning art

    4000 days of goodbyes
    leaving
    heartbreaking
    from sickness and death
    life moving on
    forum crashing
    pages
    and people
    deleted

    It's Day 4000
    and I reminisce
    of days
    when posts ran so fast that you could barely catch them before they dropped to the next page and
    critique guidelines where rigidly
    followed
    Learning to critique by the rules
    made us better writers.

    It's Day 4000
    and despite the changes
    I'm still here
    Elite is still better than flattery sites
    and it remains my family home.
    where I welcome new members
    mourn and miss old
    and await friends to drop by.

    It's day 4000
    and tomorrow
    tomorrow will be
    day 4001.

    1/23/2015
    JSC




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    | Posted on 2015-01-26 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh, wow, that is a while I must say (I have been here for as long as well...although not as often until recently). Congratulations for sticking! I also think this is the only best site for sharing one's works and getting more or less fair critiques.

    You summarized it perfectly. The emotions you felt throughout. The things you have written since the beginning and how far you have evolved as a writer. The friends you have gained, some lost, and probably some weirdos you have blocked/deleted. Obviously, it is not the same as it used to be. It has changed, for better or for worse. You can't seem to go though. I think many of us can relate to that being here as long as you.

    I especially like your first stanza:
    "It's day 4000
    Over a decade spent
    drip
    drip
    dripping
    virtual ink
    virtual emotion
    down the pages
    of Elite."
    It is so tuneful and vivid.

    Sorry to say, I feel that the last stanza can be forgone, but that is just my opinion. I think it doesn't bring anything to the rest of your beautiful poem. Otherwise, wonderful work!
    | Posted on 2015-01-23 00:00:00 | by wordsofmind | [ Reply to This ]


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