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    dots Submission Name: Software Malfunction Musings on a Karmic Systemdots
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    Author: Passionbyapathy
    ASL Info:    23/M/Columbus, Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    5.3 - 207/276/228
    Words: 176
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsSoftware Malfunction Musings on a Karmic Systemdots
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    Sleepless stuck counting
    one sheep by two sheep
    still pitch a penny to the
    fountain pen for luck
    when facing this blank page
    pluck a few choice words
    bend them to curve
    across a tongue
    sharp
    caught up counting sheep
    one sheep by two sheep
    hushed pillow talk
    pull the wool over my eyes
    so I can sweetly dream
    Put my heart on the backburner
    she's got her ass turned up
    and i'm going in like a head turner
    stepping up like a bread earner
    sneaking up like a heart murmur
    tortured soul so my sleep suffers
    earnest to a fault and its depressing
    i'm still amidst memories
    like this life isn't temporary
    living backwards, it's contrary
    to the backgrounds im operating
    system of small sounds and vibrations
    in spaces too small squared
    displacing me to somewhere else
    where I can be with
    dreamers however brief
    inbetween blinks
    and lucid
    fluid like karma
    blunt force trauma
    heart breaks and deep pain
    nerve damage and a problem
    with gambling on good will
    and hoping on a promise




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    ||| Comments |||
      I agree with riverii totally. Not much to add. All your stuff just captives.
    | Posted on 2015-04-25 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      "in between blinks
    and lucid
    fluid like karma
    blunt force trauma
    heart breaks and deep pain
    nerve damage and a problem
    with gambling on good will
    and hoping on a promise"

    the illusion is real
    this well-worn drama
    of guttural rage
    and charming bravado
    slithers like skin
    in search of a host
    all silk and all steel
    and all whisper and boast...
    | Posted on 2015-02-01 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this a lot, I always love the format and continuation of words that you use which make it almost seem like a rap in my head, haha. It does seem to end a little to abruptly though. Overall I enjoyed it and thought it was good. I can almost feel the pain and longing in this piece.
    | Posted on 2015-01-24 00:00:00 | by riverrei | [ Reply to This ]


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