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    dots Submission Name: A Clown's Caricaturedots
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    Author: Linzi
    ASL Info:    24.f.wales
    Elite Ratio:    5.91 - 80/100/94
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
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    dotsA Clown's Caricaturedots
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    A Clown's Caricature

    Flashes...blinding,
    stunning the crowed
    a perfect blank canvas to work with.
    Painting on smiles
    with crude sentiment,
    scarlet humour
    from a bloody-red gash.
    Upside down crosses
    are the windows to my soul...
    my Pupils are black as the night.
    I teach them tricks
    for twisting the features
    of puppy dogs, dragons and unicorns.
    Their laughter
    punctures my purpose,
    popping balloons like brain cells.
    On this caricature carousel
    I spin full circle,
    with my tune puppeteering it's audience.
    But as they begin to cannibalise
    through the cotton-candy womb
    of childhood...
    they sense my pretence
    and turn on me,
    this murderous mob of clowns!
    Throwing knives through the heart of satire.





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    ||| Comments |||
      Linzi – Heavy stuff. Manipulative Clown vs. Manipulated Crowd. Pupils not seeing the light until they’ve become so dark as to be described as “murderous” and inferred to have “cannibalized.” Wow, what images. Powerful. I really like it as written and wouldn’t change anything. Saw a couple of spellings that need correction, “crowd” in L2, and did you mean “punctures” or “punctuates” in L15? Anyways, a great write and an enjoyable read.

    Phil
    | Posted on 2015-01-30 00:00:00 | by phil askew | [ Reply to This ]
      Thought provoking stuff... Within my lifetime clowns have evolved from happy and joyous beings into items of fear for many. Strange how we managed that.

    We've been trained to distrust any form of pretense, which is exactly what a clown is all about. They are, after all, each a "stranger" are they not.

    And brainwashing... are you a good clown, or a bad clown? A Democrat or a Republican? A Christian or "something else"? Which clowns worship at the altar of Anthropogenic climate change and which clowns laugh at the very idea?

    One man's prophet is another man's clown.
    OK, so we're all clowns representing either jolly good fellowship or derision, one or the other. Smile!
    | Posted on 2015-01-29 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      I wrote this about society really, using the metaphor of the clown (who hides their true self), to put up a charade in order to entertain and teach children (the future generation). The satire is that the clown is teaching them about the twisted ways of society, but doesn't really agree with it's rituals herself. But as the lessons begin to rub off on the children and they get older, they see that she's a fraud who secretly opposes the standards of society that they now live by, and that she taught them. So they turn on her. It's suppose to make the reader question who are the real clowns: The teachers of society or the brain-washed mobs? And who's to blame when it goes wrong? The individual? Or the mob mentality.
    | Posted on 2015-01-27 00:00:00 | by Linzi | [ Reply to This ]
      Perhaps I misunderstood your last line as you have rewritten it. Yes, I could be murderous at those clowns also???!!! Yeah???
    | Posted on 2015-01-27 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]
      Of you wear it well!!!

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2015-01-27 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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