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    dots Submission Name: Temple of Ruindots
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    Author: rubymoon
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 155/162/91
    Words: 425
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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        Aurgh... don't know how to deal with the formatting here. The clean format on this site is good, but not if I need the font to help tell the story. If you don't mind, you can click on this link to read this in the format I intended it to. Thank you.

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    dotsTemple of Ruindots
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    I can see the traces of a former glory in your ruins.

    I came in and I’ve knelt at your altars. Worshipped
    …and felt the touch of grace and madness upon me.
    There is beauty there, a different sort of beauty.
    It is the beauty of damnation and ruin.

    The beauty

    flight
    of the

    after
    jumping

    off a cliff…


    right

    before

    the fall.




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      "There is beauty there, a different sort of beauty.
    It is the beauty of damnation and ruin."

    as critics plow the pavement searching cracks
    for the faintest most audacious signs of life

    slaughtering each slender blade of grass
    worshipping the butcher and his knife

    someone grasped the fact that hope is real
    and anger makes life easier to steal
    | Posted on 2015-02-01 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      Very solid piece. I take it possibly as a commentary on a failed form of organized religion which still motes some of the original power and grace but has somehow declined to ruin.

    This is rather sad but quite true for some of us. I particularly like the use of the word "madness" in this context because if one is touched... exactly.

    Lloyd
    | Posted on 2015-01-29 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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