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    dots Submission Name: Endless Circlesdots
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    Author: mandyshay07
    ASL Info:    17/f/kentucky yall!
    Elite Ratio:    4.74 - 119/121/32
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 278
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 673



    Description:
       i dont know...its not really about anything personal.. I was just in a horrible mood and decided to write about what its like to watch someone surrender to their own pain and fade away. If anyone has any suggestions for the 4th line I'd love to hear them..it just doesn't sound quite right to me.


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    dotsEndless Circlesdots
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    Traveling in endless circles
    to the point of no return,
    clutching broken dreams,
    giving in to the pain.

    Wandering alone,
    his heart in his hand..
    His own blood dripping
    inside and out.

    In blind frustration
    he cries out to God.
    Will this madness ever end?
    shine a light in my life.

    Yet darkness prevails
    and a strong man falls.
    Screaming and yelling,
    he gives in to the night.

    Knives slice through the flesh
    and pierce the bone.
    Darkness hovers overheard,
    until his soul has fallen
    into deaths icy grip.




    Submitted on 2004-08-05 15:33:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is good...i see it very well is about someone surrendering...it kept me reading...haha...and some poems dont...lol...
    BrennA
    | Posted on 2004-08-05 00:00:00 | by Day DreaMeR | [ Reply to This ]



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