Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: untitleddots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 167
    Class/Type: Prose/Serious
    Total Views: 702
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 946



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsuntitleddots
    -------------------------------------------


    This life is praise worthy,
    I have found peace in the details, the in between moments of silence, and yes the monotony
    I have gathered secrets that may as well be billboards regardless of the fact that I or anyone else actually sees anything but another ad for another agenda and so we block it out as if it were not a giant obvious sign

    The answer was there, hidden
    Blatant truth disguised by my decision to perceive it as another avenue to satisfy another cause that I just refused to see
    And yet in this point of facade,
    I am the cliché

    I am yet another barefoot child trying to represent some thing genuine and genuinely missing the only thing that is real,
    Its not grand or elaborate or unique save my hearts rare delight in something that once was so overstated, and now thanks to revelation whose origin is a mystery I now find the cause a substantial use of my time




    Submitted on 2015-02-02 10:43:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      "The answer was there, hidden
    Blatant truth disguised by my decision to perceive it as another avenue to satisfy another cause that I just refused to see
    And yet in this point of facade,
    I am the cliché"

    or perhaps the grand scheme of things
    is the false manifesto, the realization
    that there are no grand schemes
    no petty dreams to keep
    pretty heads awake at night
    no dreams without the realization
    dreams have teeth
    that nip at heels like tiny dogs
    with the bravado of lions
    as they taunt gazelle
    we are often not angelic, true
    but we are also too self-aware
    to march like lemmings into the mouth of hell...

    Just my thoughts on yours.
    | Posted on 2015-02-07 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    199932

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Meaningless Meanings written by ForgottenGraves
    The Curtain Call written by faideddarkness
    Untitled written by Daniel Barlow
    Mystery Read written by kyserin
    To the Artist written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Day 6 written by TheStillSilence
    The Human Harmonic written by Daniel Barlow
    Starseed written by endlessgame23
    Relentless. The Visceral Fracture. written by Daniel Barlow
    A bit of Pain written by teika5
    A Thousand Reflections written by endlessgame23
    Honeymoon written by TheStillSilence
    Lie back & tan written by Daniel Barlow
    Compartments written by TheStillSilence
    Coversheets written by TheStillSilence
    A Sense Of Things written by Daniel Barlow
    Dream written by closetpoet
    Verse: written by Daniel Barlow
    Live In Between written by teika5
    Sword in the Water written by Wolfwatching
    Loop-di-Loop written by endlessgame23
    Hyle written by endlessgame23
    Rooted in Nature written by Chelebel
    Delicious Stews written by elephantasia
    Across the bed written by expiring_touch
    Keep written by TheStillSilence
    Twin Intercept written by Daniel Barlow
    The Want written by Daniel Barlow
    In a Corner written by jeniecel
    Adoration written by TheStillSilence

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry