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Alight


Author: Queen_of_spades
ASL Info:    21/F/Nocturne
Elite Ratio:    2.79 - 95 /166 /107
Words: 54
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Alight



There is nothing else like this
I am free to the core of my being

light
air
transparent
drifting
dreaming

alight with possibility

I am simply a complete and endless infinity

There is nothing left to desire

than my aching craving
to share every bit with

you




Submitted on 2015-02-05 05:56:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I love this. I haven't read anything with this sort of format so I was a little skittish to read it but I enjoyed it very much. I can definitely relate to that feeling of being free and yet wanting to share everything with someone. It's almost like you've lost that freedom because you desire so much to be around and share everything with this person that you're tied to the hip. The pull this person has can make you feel free which is always a wonderful feeling. I'm having issues explaining my thoughts this morning lol.

Overall I liked this piece a lot and look forward to reading more by you :)
| Posted on 2015-02-16 00:00:00 | by riverrei | [ Reply to This ]
  Ah yes, there is a lot to be said for a thorough understanding of self, to feel complete as an individual, but I agree this still leaves us feeling incomplete, we want a partner with which to share. Indeed, paradoxically so!!

Bruce
| Posted on 2015-02-05 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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