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    dots Submission Name: Maybe, Okay, I Don't, Caredots
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    Author: TeslaKoyal
    Elite Ratio:    1.8 - 19/66/85
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsMaybe, Okay, I Don't, Caredots
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    Disappearing
    Apprehensive
    Paranoia
    Defensive
    Lying here
    Crying there

    Inspection
    Depression
    Misleading
    Intention
    Lying here
    Crying here

    No
    I said no
    Maybe
    Okay
    I don't care
    Means nothing

    Fine
    I said I'm fine
    Go away
    Get out
    Leave me alone
    Means nothing

    Don't
    Stop it
    Please
    No don't
    Please don't!
    Stop!!
    Means nothing

    Again?
    No
    C'mon...
    No
    Now!
    No
    !@#$%^&
    Stop!!

    Means nothing
    Means nothing
    Means nothing

    4, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 10, 11, 12, 13...
    Enough?
    No
    More?
    No
    Maybe
    Okay
    I don't care

    23
    Still screaming
    Inside
    Outside
    Stop?
    No
    Maybe
    Okay
    I don't care

    Used
    Enough?
    No
    More?
    No
    Now!
    NO!
    Stop
    Please just stop

    Give up
    Give in
    Just do it
    Just do it
    Just give up
    Just give in
    No
    Maybe
    Okay
    I don't care




    Submitted on 2015-02-06 12:21:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      you sound so tired
    thank you for the read
    I'm not the brightest bulb in the box
    so my critique would not help you

    reading this I see nothing I'd change
    | Posted on 2015-02-12 00:00:00 | by deluka | [ Reply to This ]


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