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    dots Submission Name: Untitleddots

    Author: TeslaKoyal
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 19/66/84
    Words: 302
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Doing time willingly
    Though I can live freely
    I choose to stay in a cage
    But I'm still me
    You see...

    Once upon a time
    In a little girl's life
    Carrying a burden
    Not knowing wrong
    Not knowing right
    She dug a giant hole
    To a world less cold
    In her mind
    Where she lived so blind
    To the reality around her

    The evil surrounding
    Her heart pounding
    With fear
    And every tear was real
    How did she feel
    She didn't even know
    Where to go
    For protection
    For affection
    Her heart yearning
    For something she didn't know

    No love
    Just hate
    Leading only to
    And self-mutilation
    She didn't care
    All those stares
    Rude comments
    And sickened glares
    Like she was a freak
    Not allowed to speak
    To anyone

    Just garbage
    She was trash
    To herself
    Nothing but ash
    To herself
    A candle never lit
    A never ending pit
    Of destruction
    Never construction

    Life was a confusion
    Love was an illusion
    Every breath
    Life and death
    Were irrelevant
    A black hole
    Lonely soul
    With a painful past
    She can't let go

    Many years later
    Not a hater
    But a lover
    About to discover
    The beginning
    Of a life so great
    Someone to relate
    With many things
    A man
    A wonderful man
    Who happened to stand
    In front of her
    A protector
    He was what she needed
    What she wanted
    And though she's still haunted
    He holds her
    And molds her
    Into what she is today

    I am her
    There's no blur
    Not a cure
    But bright light
    Despite her current situation
    No imitations
    No self-confrontations
    Just creations
    For the world to see
    How easy things can be
    Your burden released
    Once you find peace
    And nobody can break me

    Submitted on 2015-02-06 12:34:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    Thanks for a great read
    this mother moved me
    I like your style of writing I've been reading through!
    never let go of that pen!
    you honestly do have talent
    I like reading all poetry
    be it happy,deep,sad,what ever I read I aborb like a sponge.
    Well done!
    | Posted on 2015-02-13 00:00:00 | by deluka | [ Reply to This ]
      This is what I would call beat poetry. It has a drive rhythm and rhyme scheme that makes the reader think in something akin to rap form. It's amazing what a good relationship can do to self-esteem and how easily it can change your life. Especially if you've known a series of crappy relationships of all types. Sounds like you found your rock.
    | Posted on 2015-02-10 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]

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