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    dots Submission Name: The fightdots

    Author: Tidal33
    ASL Info:    25/F/Vegas
    Elite Ratio:    2.28 - 20/28/23
    Words: 136
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThe fightdots

    Sometimes I feel like two different people

    Fighting over the same life

    What direction i should take

    What path I should endure

    And I am broken

    Two single ideas

    Struggling to become one

    Tripping over sanity and reality

    And I'm lost

    I can't have what I want

    Because what I had is a bad idea

    But what I had was my heart

    and now It is gone

    I'm struggling to make sense

    And to replace it but I can't

    The indifference is exhausting

    And I'm tired

    We said goodbye

    but I never meant it

    And now the game is over

    And I've lost it to nothing

    And all I want is you

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      It seems so hard to let go of someone when they let go of us. Your poem spoke to me.
    | Posted on 2015-04-15 00:00:00 | by incredibleegg | [ Reply to This ]
      Very good and regrettable.
    | Posted on 2015-02-16 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      I know exactly how this feels. My very first boyfriend, the love of my life, and I were like that. Oddly enough so is my current love of my life and fiance. However, with my first love, we would fight and break up and always come back together. Until the one time we just didn't. He couldn't handle it anymore and I wasn't enough for him anymore, or love wasn't. I missed him and mourned our relationship for over 4 years and I will still always love him but we will never get back what we had then and it makes me sad.

    My current fiance and I fight and break up and fight and break up and make up but I'm hoping to stop that cycle because I don't want to lose him like I did my first love. I can't go through what you describe in your poem with him as I did my first love.

    Thank you for the words for thought this morning. As you can tell I can very much relate to this. I hope that you can find a way to move on and find someone else who makes you happy, as I have been able to do. I know very well that it is easier said that done, but I promise you there is someone else out there for you.

    Keep writing, I look forward to reading more by you. Thank you for sharing it with us.
    | Posted on 2015-02-16 00:00:00 | by riverrei | [ Reply to This ]

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