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    dots Submission Name: Secret Windowdots
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    Author: TeslaKoyal
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 19/66/84
    Words: 134
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsSecret Windowdots
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    Seeing things for the last time
    Things that tear, burn or break
    Opening new eyes to old sights
    Waiting for the taunting ache

    Back to reality where it hurts
    The walls staring through me
    I'm torn, burned and broken
    But what's this that I can see

    Up the rusty spiral stairs
    Beyond the 4 cornering walls
    Across the splintered floorboards
    The secret window calls

    Looking at another world
    Bright colors beyond belief
    Then a gray cloud drifts over
    A voice tells me to leave

    Who is it but a monster
    The one to make me feel
    All of these bad feelings
    That are just way too real

    Do whatever you want to me
    Hurt me every single day
    Just give me my secret window
    And then I'll be okay




    Submitted on 2015-02-18 20:27:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      What's that physics now says, nothing takes shape until you pay it attention? Or something like that. Some windows are also doors, so some may say. Or something like that.

    Nice work.

    Lloyd
    | Posted on 2015-03-13 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      A window is an appropriate place to expect one to put onee hopes for angiven situation. Escape of any kind is grand but I like your particular voice here in this piece.

    Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed reading.
    | Posted on 2015-02-21 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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