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    dots Submission Name: are our minds & thoughts really free?dots

    Author: CrypticBard
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 368/381/226
    Words: 54
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsare our minds & thoughts really free?dots

    The world, indeed, is too much with us...
    There is a rumbling in the distance
    and he turns around to see shadows;
    stunning and seductive in form,
    unrelenting in its melodies.
    Belatedly it dawned on him,
    his imagination was hijacked with permission.
    And still they rumble, ever closer; on and on.

    Submitted on 2015-02-21 03:06:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Okay, you've hijacked mine. I would like a bit more of this little gem. I'm not sure the bosom was truly seductive, or was it? This is almost like an responsive or analysis poem of Wordsworth, but it still has it's own merits without reading the original poem.
    Sorry I have not constructive criticism on this one, but thanks for the read.
    | Posted on 2015-02-23 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]

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