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    dots Submission Name: Dream Statedots
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    Author: ShindigHero
    Elite Ratio:    0.19 - 0/2/2
    Words: 190
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsDream Statedots
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    Turning under the covers for the umpteenth time,
    switching off seemingly impossible.
    Keeping eyelids closed a chore,
    staring at a wall, the ceiling, the floor.

    Poison amber sodium streetlight pervades the gaze
    I follow the shape of a silhouette of the window pane with each passing car.
    I close my eyes once more.
    A show reel of insignificant daily events unravels.
    The mind searches an enthralling tangent soon losing interest.

    The imagination takes over, that tedious friend.
    Finally the mind empties, detachment, letting go.
    Kaleidoscopic shapes traverse mindscape freely
    random, chaotic, spontaneous, psychedelic, immersive.

    Darkness prevails.

    Consciousness takes on an assumed guise.
    Recognisable faces, expressions, whimsical clichés of speech
    A conversation with a stranger in familiar scenario,
    passing conversation with a receptionist.
    A strange voice calls me in a formal tone,
    I am told to accompany unfamiliar colleagues.
    I feel needed, enfranchised, an affirmative sense of identity.
    Though this is not me, the real me.
    This is a surrogate me who stands in when I am dead to the world.
    I have successfully reached Dream State.

    Asleep at last.




    Submitted on 2015-02-22 11:31:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was very meh to me...I liked the concept and the behind your work and what you were aiming at, and I can definitely relate; I can say I've definitely felt this way before. However, I do feel like this isn't original which makes me not enjoy this piece as much as I probably should. I do hope you keep writing though and I want to read more from you because I do think you have some potential. Thank you for sharing this!
    | Posted on 2015-02-23 00:00:00 | by riverrei | [ Reply to This ]
      This was great fun!! You have more??

    Contrarily I like to think that the élan vital in id conclusiveness is a vibrant and virile vicissitude on the verve. What does it mean to become dead to the world?

    Bruce

    PS: You can eliminate duplicates by going to edit delete and deleting one of them!
    | Posted on 2015-02-22 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]
      Alternative ending: asleep at last admittedly an afterthought
    | Posted on 2015-02-22 00:00:00 | by ShindigHero | [ Reply to This ]

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
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