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    dots Submission Name: Cant Enchantdots

    Author: Blue Monk
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    Words: 51
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    By void avoid each shifting phase
    through never ending purple maze
    of months and days each second plays

    beyond the witch's gaze

    into the pot we've long forgot
    where ripples grow if not for rot
    a pointed nose of power grows

    or so we must suppose

    Submitted on 2015-02-23 13:54:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I've read this several times now. The eternal rhyme makes me want you to continue. It was like a peek at a rap song not quite complete.
    Not sure if this has any connection to your journal, but the passing through the purple maze and second guesses, well they just fit.

    I like this as an abstract piece that leaves the reader to interpret against their experiences, because we all wade through the gooey maze and second guess things. it's also true that we let i go or it grows in power when given attention (at least in our minds).
    | Posted on 2015-03-10 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the internal rhymes; void avoid and not for rot, especially.
    Of course, I also like the purple maze.

    As for the nose...
    I saw it differently than Bruce.
    Rather than a nosy Parker, I thought of a tyrranical Pinnochio...
    I guess perspective is a rather odd filter.

    I enjoyed this snappy little ditty. Im happy to see the muse still visits you.

    | Posted on 2015-03-01 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]
      I will not be voyeurized into submission. nosy fu(kers.
    | Posted on 2015-02-23 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]

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