I've read this several times now. The eternal rhyme makes me want you to continue. It was like a peek at a rap song not quite complete.
Not sure if this has any connection to your journal, but the passing through the purple maze and second guesses, well they just fit.
I like this as an abstract piece that leaves the reader to interpret against their experiences, because we all wade through the gooey maze and second guess things. it's also true that we let i go or it grows in power when given attention (at least in our minds).