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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    I wake up mildly sweating
    The wetness is cool against my neck and forehead
    It smells sweet,
    Like my shampoo.

    I hear him softly crying
    His tears like dew drop on heavenly clouds
    The air around us is refreshing,
    As winter drafts come through the room.

    Its just as I had dreamed, hoped, prayed for...
    Just as simple and perfectly good,
    With duty, honor and innocence,
    I will take care of you.




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      dealing with some iconic images/imagery
    I like how the bottom strophe is empowered by the word innocence

    because once you read that part you go back, back to the drumming dreamed, hoped, prayed for

    and it is a most lovely setting. the spirit bestowed.
    and you are owing to that companion

    So. Magnificently placed, everything. as you have it in this poem.
    | Posted on 2015-05-03 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
      Children open up a whole new perspective from which to write. This is beautiful in describing those late night moments where it's just you and a cranky baby, but you wouldn't have it any other way. Congrats on the new title. Mom is still my favorite, but I'm not Grandma yet...lol.
    | Posted on 2015-03-04 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful. Just beautiful. You've really captured what it means to be a mother. I love you!
    | Posted on 2015-03-01 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      That's got to be a load off your legs. I'm so happy for you. 10 toes 10 fingers and healthy, it doesn't get much better than this. But it does, good luck!

    Buce
    | Posted on 2015-02-26 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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