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    dots Submission Name: Last day of summerdots

    Author: CrypticBard
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 368/381/226
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    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsLast day of summerdots

    Farewell, days of summer
    Your sweat stains remain;
    And the fading tan lines
    Blend into a chalky frame.
    Let's point to autumn leaves
    To hide the pale underneath
    Folds of warmer sleeves.
    Maybe our winter hibernation
    Shall blossom into sparkly spring.

    Submitted on 2015-02-28 05:03:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      As a Floridian, I am not fond of summer.

    No grammar errors nor misused words. I wish it was longer, but I can see how that may make it lose it's glow.

    The possibilities of what it's a metaphor for are endless. I'm partial to the theory that each season correlates to a stage in one's life. However, tge only way to make that theory work here is if you're a believer in reincarnation, eh?

    | Posted on 2015-03-19 00:00:00 | by Carosuel | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the metaphors here and the imagery is very beautiful. I do wish spring would hurry, I don't mind the cold but the snow gets to me from time to time. Anyways this was short but sweet. Enjoyed reading.
    | Posted on 2015-03-02 00:00:00 | by ShadowParadox | [ Reply to This ]

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