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    dots Submission Name: Dirty Little Lambdots
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    Author: TeslaKoyal
    Elite Ratio:    1.79 - 19/67/85
    Words: 209
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsDirty Little Lambdots
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    A little lamb, pure white, no dirt, no stripes, born banned
    Led astray, tossed away, the anger, the hate, the greed
    Not a care, only pain, just a waste of space, taking up land
    Being captured, by wolves, taking what they want, to feed
    Being bad, punishment, no escape, just beat and raped
    Not noticed, ignored, exiled, by the sheep, no protection
    Run away, doesn't matter where, a way out, finally escaped
    A trap, soon to be snatched, yet again, for the next injection
    Treated badly, kicked around, by bigger animals, but why
    Little lamb, all alone, moving place to place, no real home
    Don't move, never speak, just behave, and don't ever cry
    Can't fight back, more pain, more shame, more rape to come
    It doesn't matter, anyway, every ounce of fear is shown
    More beatings, more shame, more crying, and more stains
    Little lamb, so broken, scared in the dark, crying all alone
    Bad thoughts, fear and hatred, the tears pour down like rain
    Trust no one, dirty little lamb, there's no hope, just give up
    So worthless, so ugly, little lamb, you deserve nothing
    You're just a bad lamb, and you'll never be good enough
    So go away, you are nothing, just trash, dirty and disgusting




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