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Author: OneDarkFlame92
ASL Info:    23/m/Numeanor
Elite Ratio:    5.3 - 461 /425 /227
Words: 95
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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She clutches my hand and says "I'm sure"
we breathe too clearly with doubt on our tongues
rain trickles down the window, illuminated by streetlights
and the scene is set

She clutches my arm and feels that I'm sure
it's morning now and things come clearly
but it's too early to be sure
as the clock slows once more

She clutches my arm and says "I'm scared"
I sigh too heavily and tears escape
the doctors have come to take her away

the day has come to take you away

Submitted on 2015-02-28 16:02:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I assume this is about abortion?

Anyways, I think you are spot on at describing the way it really is for a young woman, whatever her reason may be. It is easier to make a decision when you're not actually there at the doctor's office. But once your name is up, it seems as if life flashes you by and there is hesitancy, alarm, doubt, maybe even wanting of changing your mind.

I like the way you write "She clutches my hand and says 'I'm sure'", making it seem like she's not sure at all. And then the feeling becomes even stronger by the end. I sincerely sympathize with the protagonist.

Beautiful simple yet very piercing write.
| Posted on 2015-03-01 00:00:00 | by wordsofmind | [ Reply to This ]

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