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    dots Submission Name: Mental Princessdots

    Author: ShadowParadox
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 23/66/34
    Words: 186
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsMental Princessdots


    Inked sketches of . . .

    ( Mental Princess )


    I'm different


    I'm crucified

    In Lucifer's eyes


    ( I A M )



    Cursed with lies



    Cryptic fits


    ( D O N ' T )


    Verify my figure

    Inside my veins

    Is blood filled vigor

    Insanity Vanity

    Unsanitary Sanitarium

    Skeleton screams volume

    Snip snap Mary's creepy hum


    ( J U D G E )


    Not thy poet

    Unless her pen

    Gives permission

    For you to hold it

    Ink bled

    But not red

    Dead words

    Slaves heard

    Voices in head


    Rhythm you give them

    A musical freedom prism


    Made with silk tassels

    Stale kisses, abusive switches

    I have no riches

    I'm not free

    For "mental princess"

    They labeled


    ( M E )


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      no mistakes though MyPeriodical did point out a truth
    | Posted on 2015-04-15 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]
      In the fourth stanza, I'd imagined "Voices in (her) head) subconsciously. Just a tip, or just a fun fact; take it as you will.

    It wasn't until I finished reading the entirety of the piece that it all fell into place; my interpretation making itself that of a sociopath with narcissistic tendencies...
    This may or may not have been your intention, I don't know, so you should inform me.
    I do wonder if you had any formulated intent at all.
    | Posted on 2015-03-12 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]

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