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    dots Submission Name: Mental Princessdots
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    Author: ShadowParadox
    Elite Ratio:    2.74 - 25/67/35
    Words: 186
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsMental Princessdots
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    Inked sketches of . . .

    ( Mental Princess )

    ¤

    I'm different

    So...

    I'm crucified

    In Lucifer's eyes

    ¤

    ( I A M )

    ¤

    Terrified

    Cursed with lies

    By

    Hypocrites

    Cryptic fits

    ¤

    ( D O N ' T )

    ¤

    Verify my figure

    Inside my veins

    Is blood filled vigor

    Insanity Vanity

    Unsanitary Sanitarium

    Skeleton screams volume

    Snip snap Mary's creepy hum

    ¤

    ( J U D G E )

    ¤

    Not thy poet

    Unless her pen

    Gives permission

    For you to hold it

    Ink bled

    But not red

    Dead words

    Slaves heard

    Voices in head

    ¤

    Rhythm you give them

    A musical freedom prism

    Castles

    Made with silk tassels

    Stale kisses, abusive switches

    I have no riches

    I'm not free

    For "mental princess"

    They labeled

    ¤

    ( M E )

    -




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      no mistakes though MyPeriodical did point out a truth
    | Posted on 2015-04-15 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]
      In the fourth stanza, I'd imagined "Voices in (her) head) subconsciously. Just a tip, or just a fun fact; take it as you will.

    It wasn't until I finished reading the entirety of the piece that it all fell into place; my interpretation making itself that of a sociopath with narcissistic tendencies...
    This may or may not have been your intention, I don't know, so you should inform me.
    I do wonder if you had any formulated intent at all.
    | Posted on 2015-03-12 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]


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