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    dots Submission Name: Lovestone Tombdots

    Author: ShadowParadox
    Elite Ratio:    2.73 - 25/68/35
    Words: 359
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    I close my eyes

    As my dreams writes lullabies into my heart
    My thoughts become fairy tales
    As I lean into the spine of Love

    I don’t understand you
    Whisper I
    My words blooming into a flower
    against Love’s lips

    She smiles bleeding herself inside the flower
    Folding herself into the crevices of my heart
    She sings the lullabies that were written on my heart

    Then moves through me searching
    Searching for my inner pain

    She finds it
    Lingering on the edge of my soul


    My inner fear

    She buries herself inside my ache
    I try to unhook her but she’s embedded deep in me
    I scream frustrated

    I’m too late

    My metamorphosis has already begun
    I cry
    My tears blueish ink
    Dripping on my paper folded wings

    Your monster is beautiful
    Love’s words burns through me
    I’m twisted into myself drowning
    In the galaxy of this phobia

    I unsheathe my claws into the ground

    I will carve forbidden dreams into the root of this world
    Carving curves of butterflies
    Torn from imaginations dimensions
    I will lace their bodies into Moon’s patterns
    Drowning their porcelain wings
    Inside the temple of silhouettes

    I then sprinkle these vows onto my belly
    But are these empty promises?

    The butterflies become ashes
    Evaporating into the fog of my mind
    I am broken inside of Him
    As Love laughs and swallows my emotions
    Leaving me with hers

    I tried to create my own fantasy
    It crashed and burned down a long time ago
    Now I’m forced to swim in this ocean
    Of the one I may love

    I have blossomed into a romance sarcophagus
    Dripping with angst
    I have become the ink inside my lover’s eyes
    He gazes at me and smiles

    But I’m not lost in his maze yet
    My wings are stretched and open yet I can’t fly

    I’ve become a dream stitched to Lover’s bones
    I will only be released
    When he awakens
    From his sleeping beauty slumber

    Until then I’m stuck
    Inside this lovestone tomb
    Within his heart

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      L2 As my dreams write lullabies ……not writes lullabies. L6 'Whispered I' could be better, I guess "whisper I" could work if you want present tense but 'I whisper' is more proper. As I said of your colorfulness you can get away with some improperness if you wish. L27 'Love's words burn'… not "Love's words burns", though it could be 'Love's word burns'.
    | Posted on 2015-04-15 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]

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