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    dots Submission Name: The Monarch [Butterfly]dots
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    Author: ShadowParadox
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    Words: 163
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe Monarch [Butterfly]dots
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    ~~
    There he was

    Glowing in a bundle of stars
    Shifted to see his dull reflection
    There was no glory in his eyes for they melted a long time ago
    Back when the birds flew and the sun smiled

    It was all metal now
    His world

    Tilted into a triangle
    Inverted in ink
    He had a crumpled paper heart
    With permanent creases
    He was imperfect

    He buried himself in minutes
    Swallowing the hollowness from out the air
    The shallow room was nothing more
    Than a stained glass prison

    He disliked the colors
    Wishing they would bleed from his sight

    They did

    But it was only because his prison shattered
    For his wings had bloomed

    The colors he hated were on his wings

    He was free
    But he will never forget how his freedom came to be
    For those colors were the sorrow he suffered
    Now they are the jewels of his rebirth
    ~~




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      L14 Swallowing the hollowness from out of the air, though I guess you could call it style to say simply "from out the air" if you want.
    | Posted on 2015-04-15 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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