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    dots Submission Name: Rats Condemn the Muttdots
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    Author: TeslaKoyal
    Elite Ratio:    1.76 - 19/70/88
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsRats Condemn the Muttdots
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    The rat runs in the sewer
    To tell his friends a lie
    They gather in a circle
    And eat their gossip pie
    While up above, a mutt
    Walking on the streets
    Smells the nasty rodents
    And then quickly retreats
    Stumbling over nothing
    Falling down in a rut
    As an army of rats run
    To find the hiding mutt
    Once they find their target
    The rats all gather around
    Laughing at the mutt
    And where it was found
    They take it to the sewer
    To become one of them
    But if no cooperation
    The mutt will be condemned
    Even so, it did not give up
    It wouldn't let them know
    They had made it possible
    To drain an empty soul




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      Of that three legged dog kicked their asses!!!!!!

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2015-03-05 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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