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    dots Submission Name: Conversations with the Moon dots

    Author: MmR
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    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsConversations with the Moon dots

    With ceaseless love
    I gaze upon the face
    That always returns to whisper

    Too many nights
    My love
    You have come for me
    To torment and comfort
    Mocking without judgment
    The loneliness of me
    And my never-whole soul.

    Was I created to be a half
    To long for something more
    Yet never to realize
    What it may truly be
    Let alone its completion...
    Or have i stumbled into
    What I am this day
    Each drunken night
    Losing myself more and more
    Yearning for such things
    I shall never have nor feel

    Just as I shall never have
    Nor feel you
    Though you come for me
    More often than I'd care to confess
    Usually as I sip the last drop
    Of my cheap red wine
    Pondering yet again
    Why is it only my moon
    Who sees me as I am.

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      This as Nadia commented caught me up in the melancholy, but it also begs the question if anyone really sees us. Or maybe the question is "Do we see ourselves?" I try to spend time alone with myself centering, but I often wonder how others really see me, or if they do? We never ask, and if I do I get a really strange look, especially from my husband (He thinks it's a trick question). I don't think it matters how close you are to others, you will never see yourself exactly as they do. Just remember that looking through someone else's eyes can be a good thing. Beautiful, haunting, and thought provoking.
    | Posted on 2015-03-10 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought that was very magical in a melancholy tone. Having open conversations with the enticing and hypnotizing moon, showing all your vulnerabilities with no masks on. I think that is brave and beautiful, and I wish that we could be as open to human beings as we are with nature.
    | Posted on 2015-03-10 00:00:00 | by wordsofmind | [ Reply to This ]

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