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It's Pointless

Author: TeslaKoyal
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It's Pointless

Whispers, they promised
What was never had
Grasped for a moment
Then gone in a flash
Finding the sly serpent
Who turned out to be fake
Pushed me in right away
When led to a black lake
Drowning in the muck
Suffocated by the lies
Wanting to be heard
But no one hears my cries
Listening to noises
The ones in my head
Hoping to drown quicker
Wishing that I was dead
Suddenly a crack forms
Inside the black lake
The muck slides on through
But it must be a mistake
A blind soulless creature
Can't possibly live
Not in this environment
Where nothing can give

Submitted on 2015-03-10 18:39:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I can't imagine such an environment, the give it up obviousness of it was due yesterday, like not even nobody know-where saying nothing. You can't run and you can't hide………open up your eyes!!!!!!

| Posted on 2015-03-10 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]

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