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    dots Submission Name: It's Pointlessdots
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    Author: TeslaKoyal
    Elite Ratio:    1.79 - 19/67/85
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Whispers, they promised
    What was never had
    Grasped for a moment
    Then gone in a flash
    Finding the sly serpent
    Who turned out to be fake
    Pushed me in right away
    When led to a black lake
    Drowning in the muck
    Suffocated by the lies
    Wanting to be heard
    But no one hears my cries
    Listening to noises
    The ones in my head
    Hoping to drown quicker
    Wishing that I was dead
    Suddenly a crack forms
    Inside the black lake
    The muck slides on through
    But it must be a mistake
    A blind soulless creature
    Can't possibly live
    Not in this environment
    Where nothing can give




    Submitted on 2015-03-10 18:39:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I can't imagine such an environment, the give it up obviousness of it was due yesterday, like not even nobody know-where saying nothing. You can't run and you can't hide………open up your eyes!!!!!!

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2015-03-10 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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