It's Pointless

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It's Pointless

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Whispers, they promised What was never had Grasped for a moment Then gone in a flash Finding the sly serpent Who turned out to be fake Pushed me in right away When led to a black lake Drowning in the muck Suffocated by the lies Wanting to be heard But no one hears my cries Listening to noises The ones in my head Hoping to drown quicker Wishing that I was dead Suddenly a crack forms Inside the black lake The muck slides on through But it must be a mistake A blind soulless creature Can't possibly live Not in this environment Where nothing can give

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I can't imagine such an environment, the give it up obviousness of it was due yesterday, like not even nobody know-where saying nothing. You can't run and you can't hide………open up your eyes!!!!!! Bruce

| Posted on 2015-03-10 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]

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