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    dots Submission Name: Nightdots
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    Author: monad
    ASL Info:    64/M/California
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 1092/410/117
    Words: 51
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsNightdots
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    The sun is gone , the lights are on , we slowly circle towards the dawn . The endless deep beckons sleep , I listen while the willows weep . Warm in subconscious revelry I lie and think of what I’d be and struggle for eternity .




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    ||| Comments |||
      That is a very good description of night. Very well done!
    | Posted on 2015-04-17 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      Just can't get over the idea you consider circling at over a thousand miles an hour slow. U must be used to a quicker pace than us country boys:-)
    | Posted on 2015-04-05 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]
      So half the cities where I live went into a total black out for no apparent reason. I found it very strange yet it was interesting and kinda relaxing. So this piece reflects how I feel right now. I read and reread and it makes me feel nostalgic yet very relaxed and sleepy. I like this because it puts me into a hypnotic reverie. The last stanza I am still chewing on. It makes me think deeply. Enjoyed this very much.
    | Posted on 2015-03-14 00:00:00 | by ShadowParadox | [ Reply to This ]


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