Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Nightdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: monad
    ASL Info:    64/M/California
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 1087/407/116
    Words: 51
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 1110
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 235



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsNightdots
    -------------------------------------------


    The sun is gone , the lights are on , we slowly circle towards the dawn . The endless deep beckons sleep , I listen while the willows weep . Warm in subconscious revelry I lie and think of what I’d be and struggle for eternity .




    Submitted on 2015-03-10 21:27:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      That is a very good description of night. Very well done!
    | Posted on 2015-04-17 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      Just can't get over the idea you consider circling at over a thousand miles an hour slow. U must be used to a quicker pace than us country boys:-)
    | Posted on 2015-04-05 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]
      So half the cities where I live went into a total black out for no apparent reason. I found it very strange yet it was interesting and kinda relaxing. So this piece reflects how I feel right now. I read and reread and it makes me feel nostalgic yet very relaxed and sleepy. I like this because it puts me into a hypnotic reverie. The last stanza I am still chewing on. It makes me think deeply. Enjoyed this very much.
    | Posted on 2015-03-14 00:00:00 | by ShadowParadox | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    200048

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Or are we written in the sand? written by Chelebel
    Brigit written by endlessgame23
    Bee Keeper written by endlessgame23
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Fasade written by jackz
    Waiting written by Daniel Barlow
    Wish written by Daniel Barlow
    Once Again written by krs3332003
    Treasure Chest written by PieceOfCake
    Dashboard Light written by layDsayD
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Bond written by saartha
    Deaf Dumb and Blind is no excuse written by poetotoe
    102.3 written by rev.jpfadeproof
    The Song on Your Guitar written by SavedDragon
    The Promise written by annie0888
    One Day written by WriteSomething
    Summer written by layDsayD
    Devils in the Details written by endlessgame23
    Sleep Talk written by Queen_of_spades
    Whiteout written by layDsayD
    Pain, an elixir. written by Ramneet
    Wavelength written by saartha
    Push written by JanePlane
    World I No Longer Want written by ForgottenGraves
    It's Night Now written by RisingSon
    Cosmic Dreams written by Chelebel
    True Death written by layDsayD
    The Severed Head written by HisNameIsNoMore
    4th of July written by layDsayD

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry