Somewhere between the here and now lies a place forever, where I stand with you in the morning sun beside a waterfall and watch the river of creation flow gently to the sea .
To take you in the water like a nymph all dressed in dew , while our sprits soar to mountain tops to fly with eagles and climb with ewes . In love is an eternity that cannot be concealed , but no matter what you say of it it’s only what you feel .
This is so delicately expressed and beautiful, but then right at the end it lost its grace ( rather the graceful picture stopped abruptly) with the line that it is only a feeling. As if the beauty you described loses some of its value by the writer themselves, and what a shame as the ability to completely sell this reality is powerfully present. Also coming from you, where the vocabulary is toned down and the synonyms are absent I really enjoyed a simple sweet piece, it gave you so much balance. I don't feel that you are unbalanced rather I was excited to see such an innocent principle described. I guess I could take it many ways and even though my mind and my heart started in one direction all in all I am still satisfied yet again by your work.
"Somewhere between the here and now lies a place forever, where I stand with you in the morning sun beside a waterfall and watch the river of creation flow gently to the sea ."
Between here and somewhere there is a place where forever lies,
we pretend to be there with the sun on-top of a waterfall once a glacier that formed and flowed gently to the sea of love.
"To take you in the water like a nymph all dressed in dew , while our (spirits) soar to mountain tops to fly with eagles and climb with ewes . In love is an eternity that cannot be concealed , but no matter what you say of it it’s only what you feel."
Take your waters for the climate has changed you in Grand Canyon way, nature and mothers changed you back to a little girl in love with a little boy who loves you, for Adam and Eve had there way too, now Bruce is a girl too, my, my, climate change is to blame for it, right? Silly me.
You have such a lovely way with creating tone and mood. This one feels soft, reverent, and completely assured. Beautiful imagery made the place feel like I was in the alps or maybe just New Zealand. The last line is somewhat troubling because it tells you things are not always what the seem. You give a hint of resistance. but it still does not feel like the loss of paradise, more like paradise in spite of... lovely read!
This is such a magical piece Bruce!! You have drowned me in beautiful imagery. Love is eternal. Infinite. The figure eight of healing and wholeness. Yes I have learned this, yet it did take a while. I have accepted love for what it truly is, though it has been twisted and deformed by many. Love always stays the same. Original in its own beautiful way. Thank you for sharing this, it brought lovely, happy, peaceful thoughts to me.
Monad (from Greek μονάς monas, "unit" from μόνος monos, "alone"), according to the Pythagoreans, was a term for Divinity or the first being, or the totality of all beings, Monad being the source or the One meaning without division. (Wikipedia)
So be it, although one might argue that my ending should stay as is since rather than being strict it could be interpreted as an inside joke since the poem (it could say...) is of itself that which cannot be said. ;)
Fallow 'twixt all timelessness soul mates do never fail
to bask as one under a sun beyond the fountain veil
each ken to fire's creation and bride of the cosmic sea
each death in mirth they are to suffer only by degree
Fair spirits pass in mist and dew each spirit soars anew
beyond the peaks where eagles fly where lion rests with ewe
'tis love survives eternity that we cannot conceal
but knowing this we cannot say and never shall reveal
I think you meant to write "here" in the first phrase. I enjoyed this tremendously. The beautiful eternal nature, the mystical woman again, the feeling of love and the want to grasp its eternity. If we could grasp eternity, then time would stop or it would go on forever. We wouldn't feel like mortals.