Blood White
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Sample poem I just wrote from my upcoming book~
Blood White
Aero Postal Apostolic Apotheosis Parallel farewell Synthesis Synesthesia Synergy Energy flowing Chemicals penetrating Betraying atoms Exploiting cells Bending hormones Syllable silicone Parasite insight Paralysis Paralyze Emphasize the size of lies Hidden in an apple Incapable Enable her Sleeping beauty Frozen in insecurity Where poison conflicts Inflicts Tricks The brain clock tics Seconds pass Teaser Seizure No kiss can awaken A body already broken Shaken Cocoon catalyst Butterfly analyst What list is there to share? Crossing off days gone by Stalked by a spy Those emerald hazy eyes Will open and realize That one bite was a lifetime savor Where no savior came None to blame But ones self Inner wings will now take flight The sickness tamed Oh mirror, mirror who is fairer? My dear it’s not the snow, the rain, the wind Nor thy ego within But it’s the darkness in you, which became light Shining bright Like diamond stars at night The poison has bloomed beauty within you my dear Blood White Your strength is the fairest of them all Your fall That made you rise and wise A tough climb No not once upon a time But many times before you have learned Yearned Then earned the knowledge of strife Where hidden is the secret definition of life |
Submitted on 2015-03-12 00:31:04 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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no mistakes| | Posted on 2015-04-15 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ] | Ah, it feels as though this piece were written at midnight by an open window. Perhaps I get this idea due to the mystical qualities it possesses. | You list these...outcomes, and demonstrate such a familiarity with the woman's state of body and mind that seem to be the result of pent up concepts although uncoordinated, brilliantly crude. I find the idea that her blood stain white rather than red somewhat endearing, though I don't believe that to have been your intent. I would've appreciated a couple more commas, specifically at "My dear(,) it’s not the snow" and "No(,) not once upon a time" just because I'm into poetry out-loud and those commas make the best dramatic breaks. Needless to say, this would be a hit. | Posted on 2015-03-12 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ] | |
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